argument topic

whether or not someone should get the H1N1 flu virus shot or not.

audience analysis: template B

After reviewing my audience, i have decided that the most important criteria to them would be cleanliness, quality of food, atmosphere, and variety of food. Cleanliness is an obvious one. Nobody would want to eat in a dirty restaurant because that is just gross. If they see that a restaurant is dirty then they would most likely leave and go to another one. Quality of food would also be very important to this audience because if the food is found to be crappy or not to taste good then the customers would be unhappy and not want to go back. The atmosphere is very important since most of the audience would be college students and they would want a nice friendly atmosphere in which they could eat a good meal with their friends and socialize at the same time. Also the variety of food would be important because if they offer the same foods then people would eventually get tired of it and stop going there.

template A

The restaurant that I choose to review for this assignment is Knightros. Knightros is located on the UCF campus next to the arena. It is also one of the many places on campus in which students can use their meal plan to eat food for a specified amount each semester. Never the less Knightros is still open to the public for breakfast, lunch, and dinner. The main audience of this review would have to be students who live on campus since they are closest, and also any student who plans on purchasing a meal plan. This review could help them decide if they really want to invest in a meal plan or not and to see if they will like the food that is offered to them at Knightros. The thing that would be most important to these students would be the availability and good way to get a fresh hot meal at any time during the day. Most of these students who live on campus and are freshmen will be new to the whole college experience and they will not know how to fend for themselves and cook meals every night without their parents being around to help them out. So a meal plan to Knightros could really help them out. Depending on whether or not the restaurant gets a good review or not students may or may not invest in a meal plan, some students may wait to see what their friends are doing as well so that they will have someone to eat with. This review can provide useful information to let the audience know what types of foods are offered, the cleanliness of the restaurant, the hours of operation, and even how friendly the workers there are. The audience may also find information such as what foods are good, and what foods are bad helpful as well. Most of the students also will not have a lot of money due to having to pay the big tuition bills so they will need to know if eating here will be worth it or not.

review assignment

i will be doing my review assignment on the restaurant Knightros on campus.

commentary thesis

Each and every year the UCF student enrollment gross by 5,000 students and with these students comes the need for additional parking on campus for students. These additional students add to the already 53,000 enrolled today who might have cars and they too need parking. UCF already has a problem with the amount of parking the offer to students and the additional students that are added every year do not help.

commentary outline:

Commentary Outline:

Intro:

In my introduction paragraph I will start off my giving background information about the problem and why it continues to become more and more of a problem. There will also be a strong thesis statement in the paragraph giving insight to the problem and about all the people that it affects. Address the problem, why is there not adequate parking for all 53,000 + students on campus?

First paragraph:

I will talk about the research information I found out about why the problem gets worse and why it is not getting any better. Tell about the people I interviewed and what they thought about the problem and if they are having the same problem or not. Tell why the issue is so important and affects me so much. Tell why it affects so many people in negative ways and all the problems it causes for them and others.

Second paragraph:

I will talk about some new things that I think will help make the problem better or at least stop it from getting worse from year to year. Talk about why the problem is so hard to address and why it is not being focused on more.

Third paragraph:

Tell about some of the issues that made the problem a lot worse such as the cutting of bus routes and the closing of an entire parking lot during the fall semester.

Fourth paragraph:

Tell about how the situation could be better and if it wasn’t a problem how much better it would be for everyone. Talk again about the things that could be done to make this possible. Give examples.

The Hypocrisy Bowl

Matt Zeisloft, Rowen Divine, Mike Cinicolo

1. The commentary focuses on the exploitation of women's sexuality on television and how hypocritical people are about where and when the exploitation takes place.

2. Yes, the author does give an interesting introduction into the issue because the author paints a clear picture about what was going on and gives clear insight into the situation at hand. He tells us exactly what the article is going to be about by giving the Janet Jackson example and then going more in depth.

3. The author gives really good examples about what is going on in society at that point but does not go to in depth about the current issue and the commentary is written in a more humorous context then a serious one. It is clearly directed at society as a whole to show everyone what is becoming more acceptable, but it is seems as if it is written more for a younger crowd.

4. The possible causes of the trend the author is exploring is that sex sells. It is also that we are living in a constantly evolving world that is much more open to sexuality and not so shy about the topic.

5. The author does not go into detail about anything in his or her own life that could have been the possible causes of this trend. However, he does give example of others reactions to the issue that could possibly be the cause of the trend.

6. The author's stance on this topic is that they are more liberal then conservative and think that people are overreacting to the situation.

7. The significance that the author sees in this trend is that it is going to continue to happen because sex sells and broadcasting companies are going to continue to do whatever they need to in order to promote their network and get viewers.

letter to a friend:

Dear Jeff:

How have you been? I feel as I i have not talked to you since high school. How are things at UF? How are your classes going? Things here are great! I absolutely love UCF and all my classes are going well and my professors are amazing! My new apartment is amazing, it is so cool to actually live off campus and on my own. The only thing i do not like is the parking situation on campus. It is absolutely ridiculous! There are over 53,000 students that attend UCF and you would think that they would have enough parking to accommodate for all these students right? Ha keep dreaming, it is nearly impossible to find a parking spot here on campus for class. Sometimes i have to leave my apartment two hours before class even starts just so i have enough time to find a spot on campus and get to my class on time. I hope you aren't having the same problems in Gainesville. The parking garages and lots that UCF currently have on campus is simply not enough. What has UCF done to fix this you ask? Nothing! In fact they made it worse by cutting bus routes and they even closed an entire parking lot to do construction. Right in the middle of the fall semester, what were they thinking. Do you have any ideas on what they could do that might help out the situation? i don't know why they don't address this problem fully. Do you have any problems parking at UF? The only real solutions offered here are to carpool or ride the bus. There is a way for you to get your very own parking spot if you live in the towers but those cost $475 and what full time student would have enough money to pay for that! Riding the bus nowadays doesn't even help that much due to the fact that they are cutting routes, but the buses do still go around and they usually pick up in intervals of 15 minutes which is really good. Carpooling is hard since you are not likely to have the same exact schedule as one of your friends but if you can find one that is great. In my opinion what i think they should do is build at least one more garage parking lot on campus. Those garages are pretty big and although they are not always in the best place and you might have to walk a little ways, at least you are on campus and can walk to campus instead of driving around in circles in search of a spot. Well i hope everything is going well with you. If you have any input let me know and i hope to hear from you soon!

Your friend,

Mike

commentary interview assignment

Parking on UCF campus.

Questions about commentary:

• Why has UCF not fully addressed this problem? They have other more important things to worry about.
• What can be done to help resolve this issue? Build more parking garages or lots, offer more shuttle routes.
• Why is there not adequate parking for all students on campus? With so many students it is hard to accommodate them all at one time.
• Why would UCF close an entire parking lot during the fall semester and not during summer? They had to get the construction done.
• Why are bus routes being cut? Budget cuts.
• How do you know what you know? (evidence) observations
• Who are you to the subject? (perspective) A student and it effects me as well
• How is this event connected to other events? (patterns or opposing forces) Students often have to park illegally and then get ticketed from parking services.
• What if things were different? (suppositions/predictions) Parking would be stress free, students could get to class on time, and would Save everybody time and money.

commentary

Every year the University of Central Florida is adding more and more students to the already 53,000 already attending the University. Now, you would think that with all these extra students the University would do something to help accommodate them all on campus in regards to parking, but no, day after day students drive around for hours looking for a single place to park just so they can go to class. I think that this is absolutely ridiculous, it should not take more than ten minutes to find a parking spot on campus. Students have more important things to worry about other than leaving their apartment two hours before class actually starts to ensure themselves enough time to find a spot and get to class on time. You would that the University would try to do something to fix this problem but no, all they have done is make the problem worse. They have cut bus routes which reduce the number of students taking the bus which increases the number of students that have to drive to campus. They also closed an entire parking lot next to do construction. I have to say they picked the worst time to do construction, I mean who picks the middle of the fall semester to close an entire parking lot.

Commentary brainstorming

1. There are not enough parking spots for students on campus.

2. Students on campus wearing shirts of colleges other than
UCF.

3.Tailgating rules for UCF home football games getting more strict.

Final draft Memoir

It was a gorgeous October day and my father and I were headed to the annual pinewood derby boxcar race for troop 117 of the boy scouts. The race was being held in Jonathan Dickinson state park at the boy scouts camping ground which was tucked away deep in the woods and absolutely embedded with wildlife. The camp grounds were like a little kid’s dream world, there were rope swings, obstacle courses, tree houses, nature walks, lakes and tents set up everywhere. All the other kids as well as me had been preparing for this race for a whole month. Everyone was giving the same exact materials in order to be fair. You were given a block of wood, two nails, four wheels, and a specific number for the car. You were allowed to cut the block of wood in any shape or form as long as it didn't exceed a specific weight limit. I remember how I had cut my block of wood down so that it was shaped like two waves leading to a tail at the back and a rounded point at the front. It was blue with a jagged lightning strike down both sides and weighed exactly 9 ounces. My dad was so proud of me, I remember him saying “Mike it doesn’t matter if we win or lose, I’m still so proud of you for all your hard work and time you put into this car”. When I heard him say that to me it felt like the whole world was lifted off my shoulders and now I could just go out and have fun and see how my car would stack up against my other friends and fellow boy scouts.

It was finally time for my first race, and I was racing against three other boys down a 10 foot track and the first one down to the bottom of the track was the winner and would move on. My dad and I were so nervous for the first race and we were very anxious to see how fast our car would go. We waited anxiously as the announcer counted down to the start of the race, 5…4…3….2…….1 and he removed the block holding the cars in place and off they went. All four cars immediately speed up and headed down the track at what seemed like blistering speeds, my car was in first followed very closely by the red demon. We were jockeying for first place, pacing each other back and forth wondering who would emerge victorious. The crowds of bystanders were all yelling in pure excitement and anticipation wondering just as much as we were who was going to win. Finally, it came down to the home stretch with my car barely in the lead and then it was over and I had won! My dad and I jumped up in joy, so ecstatic that we had just won the race not knowing that our journey to the championship was far from over.

A little while later it was time for the second race, and since only the winners moved on we knew that our opponents would be tougher and faster than the ones before. Once again we waited anxiously for the announcer to drop the gate and let the cars go. 5…4…3...2...1 and there off, this time my car was trailing the other three cars by a whole car length. I thought I was done for sure but then out of nowhere my car zooms down the track leaving the competitors in the dust. Still surprised by the come from behind victory, my dad and I didn’t know what to do with ourselves since we thought we were going to lose for sure. The crowd was going crazy, yelling at the unbelievable comeback saying “Go Mike”, and “Go Blue Lightning” which is what my car came to be known as. I was so happy hearing everyone yelling my name and cheering me and my car on that my dad and I had worked so hard on. Now it was finally time for the championship race and this time I was only racing one competitor, my best friend Caleb who I have known my whole live. Caleb had a neon green car with a spoiler that looked kind of like a mustang. It had yellow lightning bolts on the hood of the car and on the sides it said “Flash”. Caleb always had a fast car every year so I was very scared. It was finally race time and now there were more people surrounding the track than ever before! Everything was on the line and either we win and go home a champion or lose and go home unsatisfied. We all waited patiently as both cars were lined up on the starting line of the track. All eyes were fixated on the track starring just wondering who would win. For the last time the announcer says 3….2…1 go! Down go both cars swiftly down the track, both Caleb and I watch hoping that we would win. My dad and I watch biting our nails knowing that there is nothing we can do now to help achieve victory as the cars barrel down toward the finish line. We were neck and neck heading into the home stretch, and you could sense the excitement building throughout the room. The announcer was saying “And here they come, Flash and Blue Lightning neck and neck with only 5 feet left to go. Blue lightning takes the lead by a few centimeters leading into the last leg of the race, and he holds on for the victory! Blue Lightning wins, Blue Lightning wins!” My dad and I both burst out screaming in joy knowing that it was all over and that we had finally won. All the hard work that I had put into building and preparing my little pinewood derby boxcar had paid off and I was so enthused and happy with myself.

rough draft

It was a gorgeous October day and my father and I were headed to the annual pinewood derby boxcar race for troop 117 of the boy scouts. The race was being held in Jonathan Dickinson state park at the boy scouts camping ground which was tucked away deep in the woods and absolutely embedded with wildlife. The camp grounds were like a little kid’s dream world, there were rope swings, obstacle courses, tree houses, nature walks, lakes and tents set up everywhere. All the other kids as well as me had been preparing for this race for a whole month. Everyone was giving the same exact materials in order to be fair. You were given a block of wood, two nails, four wheels, and a specific number for the car. You were allowed to cut the block of wood in any shape or form as long as it didn't exceed a specific weight limit. I remember how I had cut my block of wood down so that it was shaped like two waves leading to a tail at the back and a rounded point at the front. It was blue with a jagged lightning strike down both sides and weighed exactly 9 ounces. I was so proud of the car that I had made with a little help from my dad and was so excited to start racing and see how it would stack up against my other friends and fellow boy scouts.

It was finally time for my first race, and I was racing against three other boys down a 10 foot track and the first one down to the bottom of the track was the winner and would move on. My dad and I were so nervous for the first race and we were very anxious to see how fast our car would go. We waited anxiously as the announcer counted down to the start of the race, 5…4…3….2…….1 and he removed the block holding the cars in place and off they went. All four cars immediately speed up and head down the track at what seemed like blistering speeds, my car is in first followed very closely by the red demon. We were jockeying for first place, pacing each other back and forth wondering who would emerge victorious. The crowd of bystanders were all yelling in pure excitement and anticipation wondering just as much as we were who was going to win. Finally, it came down to the home stretch with my car barely in the lead and then it was over and I had won! My dad and I jumper up in joy, so ecstatic that we had just won the race not knowing that our journey to the championship was far from over. A few minutes later it was time for the second race, and since only the winners moved on we knew that our opponents would be tougher and faster than the ones before. Once again we waited anxiously for the announcer to drop the gate and let the cars go. 5…4…3..2..1 and there off, this time my car was trailing the other three cars by a whole car length. I thought I was done for sure but then out of nowhere my car zooms down the track leaving the competitors in the dust. Still surprised by the come from behind victory, my dad and I didn’t know what to do with ourselves since we thought we were going to lose for sure. The crowd was going crazy, yelling at the unbelievable comeback saying “Go Mike”, and “Go Blue Lightning” which is what my car came to be known as. I was so happy hearing everyone yelling my name and cheering me and my car on that my dad and I had worked so hard on. Now it was finally time for the championship race and this time I was only racing one competitor, my best friend Caleb who I have known my whole live. Caleb had a neon green car with a spoiler that looked kind of like a mustang. It had yellow lightning bolts on the hood of the car and on the sides it said “Flash”. Caleb always had a fast car every year so I was very scared. It was finally race time and now there were more people surrounding the track than ever before! Everything was on the line and either we win and go home a champion or lose and go home unsatisfied. We all waited patiently as both cars were lined up on the starting line of the track. All eyes were fixated on the track starring just wondering who would win. For the last time the announcer says 3….2…1 go! Down go both cars swiftly down the track, both Caleb and I watch hoping that we would win. My dad and I watch biting our nails knowing that there is nothing we can do now to help achieve victory as the cars barrel down toward the finish line. We were neck and neck heading into the home stretch, with excitement building throughout the room. The announcer was saying “ And here they come, Flash and Blue Lightning neck and neck with only 5 feet left to go. Blue lightning takes the lead by a few centimeters leading into the last leg of the race. Blue lightning wins Blue lightning wins”! My dad and I both burst out screaming in joy knowing that it was all over and that we had finally won.

My dad was so proud of me for working so long and hard building this car and preparing for the race. Winning this race taught me so much about hard work and dedication and about that if you really want something all you have to do is set your heart to it and work hard. I really wanted to win this race and all I had to do dedicate myself and a little bit of time to prepare my car and it paid off. To this day I always work hard and put 100% of myself into anything I do because you never know when your good hard work will pay off.

memoir memo

To: Ms. Moody

From: Michael Cinicolo

Date: September 16, 2009

RE: peer review feedback

I am writing to you regarding how I will use and implement information that i received from my peers about my introduction paragraph to my memoir. I believe that this assignment has helped me alot to think about what i actually want to write my paper about and how I should go about doing it. One of the things that my peer had mentioned to me about my paragraph was that i did not use enough descriptive words. So i went back into my paragraph and reread it and tried to remember more specific things from the event and tried to write more descriptive adjectives to help the reader feel like he or she was there. I also learned through my peer review that I was able to convey the meaning behind this event in the first paragraph.

The reader also gave me a great idea, which was that since i described my car so vividly, i should also talk about the competitors cars and the feelings and emotions i was going through leading up too and during the race. This will help the reader have a feel for how excited i actually was and might help them understand what the atmosphere was like during this annual event. Using this peer review will help me develop a very well written draft because i will take into consideration everything he said to me because sometimes when you are writing a paper you fail to recognize the little mistakes that you make and it is easier for someone else to pick up on them and help you correct them.

memoir introduction

It was a gorgeous October day and my father and I were headed to the annual pinewood debry boxcar race for troop 117 of the boyscouts. The race was being held in Jonathan Dickinson stae park at the boyscouts camping ground which was tucked away deep in the woods down a long narrow road. The camp grounds was like a little kids dreamworld, there were ropeswings, obstacle courses, treehouses, nature walks, lakes and tents and other boyscouts everywhere. All the other kids as well as me had been preparing for this race for a whole month. Everyone was giving the same exact materials in order to be fair. You were given a block of wood, two nails, four wheels, and a specific number for their car. You were aloud to cut the block of wood in any shape or form as long as it didn't exceed a specific weight limit. I remember how i had cut my block of wood down so that it was shaped like two waves leading to a tail at the back and a rounded point at the front. It was blue and had a jagged lightning stripe down both sides and i called it flash. I was so proud of the car that i had made all by myself and was so excited to start racing and see how it would stack up against my other friends and fellow boyscouts.

memoir brainstorming

In order to prepare and think of the introduction to my memoir assignment i tried to think back to the day in which it happened and wright down everything i could remember about the weather and the scenery.

memoir assignment

potential memoir topics:

1. Winnig the pine wood derby as a boyscout.
2. hurricane francias
3. 9/11

What they are about.

1. Wen i was 6 years old i was a boyscout. every year the boyscouts would hold a competition where everyone was given all the neccesary materials to build a pinewood derby car. After about a week of preparation there would be a race to see which boyscout had built the fastest most aerodynamic car. I had one of the fastest cars in my whole group! I ended up beating all my friends and after that i was sent to a giant baseball stadium to compete against the whole state of Florida!....
2. when hurricane francias came through south Florida in 2006 it changed my life. Me and my family went to stay with my uncle in his house because his house was not supposed to be hit by the hurricane. It turned out that the hurricane had changed course at the last time and hovered over Florida and dumped alot of rain and wind down on us.
3. On September 11,2001 i was on the bus on the way to middle school when all of a sudden my bus driver turns up the radio and i hear the dj say that terrorist had just attacked the World Trade Center in New York. I was in complete shock and didnt know what to do. I can remember everything that happened that stormy day 8 years ago....

So what?

1. Winning the pine wood derby when i was so young taught me how to be independent and how hard work pays off. It taught me how to be independent because i made the card just out of a block of wood. my dad was only there to make sure i didnt get it hurt.
2. The hurricane taught me how reliant today's world is on the basic necessities of running water and elecricity. When the hurricane came over we lost power for 2 weeks and we didnt know what to do with ourselves. It was the first time i had to deal with not having power and the basic necesities.
3. Seeing this happen and watching it all over the news and seeing how it has shaped our country to be so different has taught me not to take life for granted. At any time everything you know and love can change in an instance.