commentary outline:

Commentary Outline:

Intro:

In my introduction paragraph I will start off my giving background information about the problem and why it continues to become more and more of a problem. There will also be a strong thesis statement in the paragraph giving insight to the problem and about all the people that it affects. Address the problem, why is there not adequate parking for all 53,000 + students on campus?

First paragraph:

I will talk about the research information I found out about why the problem gets worse and why it is not getting any better. Tell about the people I interviewed and what they thought about the problem and if they are having the same problem or not. Tell why the issue is so important and affects me so much. Tell why it affects so many people in negative ways and all the problems it causes for them and others.

Second paragraph:

I will talk about some new things that I think will help make the problem better or at least stop it from getting worse from year to year. Talk about why the problem is so hard to address and why it is not being focused on more.

Third paragraph:

Tell about some of the issues that made the problem a lot worse such as the cutting of bus routes and the closing of an entire parking lot during the fall semester.

Fourth paragraph:

Tell about how the situation could be better and if it wasn’t a problem how much better it would be for everyone. Talk again about the things that could be done to make this possible. Give examples.